Sentence A Day - Sentence 1

Cutting For Stone by Abraham Verghese:
In place of the normal gurgling bowel sounds, what he heard with his stethoscope was a cascade of high-pitched notes, like water dripping onto a zinc plate.

Me:
Instead of the stereotypical criminal, he was clean-shaven and sharply dressed, like a man bred for deviousness.

The author uses commas to set the imagery and adds a simile at the end.